I hate this question, please only take it as constructive.
In the first scene maybe consider giving each other a beat? Though I understand the drive to make it feel very “real” it’s still theater and because everyone is stepping on each others lines as an audience we are missing some of the character set up.
My overall impression
Very grounded in reality and a modern story. Perhaps if you continue to do the show you can extend and develop further some of the story lines. Loved the Space Dumbo song and a great voice!