ELTON IN VICE-BOYS SCANDAL

What I liked

I liked the use of headlines to help tell the story. The performer was also fully engaged telling this first hand important narrative. Very likable and did a good job with playing the other characters.

What I didn't like

It would be helpful to understand more of the motivation behind the actions of the Sun. It was touched upon, yes, but the delicious specificity of their behavior and actions that were described throughout, overshadowed the motivation behind WHY they did it. The inciting incident felt generalized.

Really liked the newspaper headlines but found myself having a hard time focusing on what was being said on stage because I was trying to read the headlines. Perhaps the performer could speak every headline out loud as they appear so there’s not a fight for attention.

I think more direction would be helpful. There was a lot of pacing back and forth that felt spontaneous and random. Perhaps when certain characters are speaking they can always be in a certain place on the stage. It would help the audience follow the storyline as well.

Also, the accents and shifts of energy / tone are working well. I would encourage the performer to work with a movement coach or the director to incorporate a specific physical action to go with each character portrayed. It will help the generalized pacing and add another layer to the storytelling.

Lastly, the performer starts the play already at level 7 and ends at 10. I think we will be carried along the ride of the play if there is more of an arc to the storytelling.
Level 3 – 10. Go deeper and more nuanced.

My overall impression

A very intriguing story with a wonderful reflection and call to action at the end. If I understand correctly, the performer is a journalist more than an actor. Great job using storytelling devices and keeping energy up throughout.